Personal Evaluation
I decided to set myself the challenge of changing the tone, originally to be more polemic (although editing removed a lot of this as I was too uncomfortable with it), as well as to be the narrator of a conversation. I pushed myself quite hard to change my review and felt quite uncomfortable with this style of writing. I think that I was much more comfortable in my first review and I think in many ways the first one was better. I think I would have ended up with a better result had I just refined that rather than changing tone. This said, I feel that the 2nd review is somewhat more concise. The narrative parts are better to read than the conversational. I also lost sight in this review of 'reviewing' and tended to be more in 'discussion'.




